Okay, typo list GO!
What if the day hadn't come. Would Gensokyo still be the same. Or would chaos ascend.
Question marks needed here.
It all started in the late summers.
"during late summer" would be better, also I'd put a linebreak afterwards if I were you.
The trees were bright yellow,
Should be "are".
Some chaos here, more fighting here.
"More fighting
there."
"Just leave it alone, Cirno's not going to eat it. At least I hope."
"I hope
not"
"But, Suwako is going to smack me for not saving the frog." Sanae's eye become watery. A tear slides down her cheeks, creating a stream of water after it.
"Sanae's
eyes become watery.
Tears slide down her cheeks,
leaving a stream of water
behind."
Reimu stares at Sanae with a black look.
"blank"
None of them move at all. Quietness fills Reimu's house like everyone had left. The only thing moving and creating sound were the trees swaying gently in the wind.
"
Neither of them move at all. Quietness fills Reimu's house
as if no-one was there. The only
things moving and creating sound
are the trees swaying gently in the wind. "
"Patchouli reported of another theft by Marisa. That thief needs to know not to disrupt my tea time."
Lose the "of". "needs to
learn"
Reimu groans as she does not want to get up, and leave her tea to cool.
"Reimu groans
, as", "
leaves her tea"
As Sanae leaves to go, night falls, and it is just one day away from the start of the end.
"As Sanae leaves to go,
night begins to fall, and it is
now just one day away from the
beginning of the end. "
because of the Youkais that wander the streets at night.
The plural of Youkai is Youkai.
Reimu drinks the rest of the tea in a hurry,
"Reimu
hurriedly drinks the rest of her tea,"
After the whole danmaku battle for the book,
"the
usual"
and eventually, Marisa's lost,
"Marisa's
loss"
the book which looks new and polished.
"the book, which appears to be as yet unread."
Reimu takes off and flies to the Scarlet Devil Mansion. On the way there, Reimu wonders why the stars seem so different tonight, and why she gets a feeling something bad is about to happen soon. After easily getting past the sleeping guard, which was snoring loudly. Sakuya should be here anytime soon to wake the guard. After entering the building, Reimu addresses the issue to Sakuya, who immediately goes to take care of the issue. Walking into the basement, Reimu smells the air, and immediately becomes tired. The scent of the books just waver over Reimu, as she trudges toward Patchouli's desk. Patchouli thanks Reimu for the return of the book. As Reimu turns around to leave, Patchouli says, "Reimu, take a look at this."
Use linebreaks!
"
She wonders why", "
who was snoring loudly", "Reimu
mentions it to Sakuya", "Walking into the
library", "The scent of books
surrounds Reimu",
and a book titled "Lost Land", which also looks old, but not as old.
"but not as
ancient as the map."
Patchouli shows Reimu her new studies and what it's about. "It seems, about a thousand years ago, there was a great war in the real world. This great war caused massive destruction and the cause of separation of many lands. I bet Gensokyo, was one of the lands. But what I was looking for was... This." Patchouli points to the bottom left of the map. "It seems like this place was the place before Gensokyo. But what was really interesting was that..." She points to the top right corner of the map where there is a land the same size as Gensokyo. "This was also called Gensokyo. It's full name was 'The Darkness of Gensokyo's wrath,' which basically meant it was the Gensokyo's wrath at the real world's war. What surprises me is that, there are people living there. And they look just like us." Patchouli points to her book where there was a picture of Cirno, but she is using fire instead of ice, and the background is much darker and miserable than this Gensokyo, almost like Gensokyo was swallowed by darkness. Right next to is a picture of Marisa, but she has the shrine, and looks to be in charge. In the picture, Marisa looks older and more sophisticated than in this Gensokyo, she seems like a whole different person.
LINE!
BREAKS!
PLEASE!
"Patchouli shows Reimu her new
area of study.
"It seems, about a thousand years ago, there was a great war in the real world. This great war caused massive destruction and
was the cause of
the separation of many lands. I
think that what is now Gensokyo was one of
these lands."
Patchouli points to the bottom left of the map. "It seems like this place was the place that
became Gensokyo.
But
, what's really interesting
, is this..." She points to the top right corner of the map where there is a land the same size as Gensokyo. "This was also called Gensokyo. It's full name was 'The Darkness of Gensokyo's wrath,' "
which basically meant it was the Gensokyo's wrath at the real world's war.
I have no idea what this sentence is supposed to mean.
"What surprises me is that there are people living there. And they look just like
the inhabitants of Gensokyo." Patchouli points to her book where there was a picture of Cirno, but she is using fire instead of ice
. The scenery is much darker and
more miserable-looking than this Gensokyo, like
it had been swallowed by darkness.
Right next to
it is a picture of Marisa, but she
is at the shrine, and looks to be in charge. In the picture, Marisa looks older and more sophisticated than in this Gensokyo, she seems like a whole different person."
"Marisa is not a shrine maiden worthy person." Reimu says trying to calm herself. But it doesn't work.
"shrine maiden-worthy", "Reimu says, trying
unsuccessfully to calm herself."
Is this true, Reimu thinks.
"
Is this true? Reimu thinks."
Reimu thinks about this for a second, but quickly dismisses the idea. "That is a bit unusual don't you think?" Reimu gets really worried, she begans to sweat a little. She says bye to Patchouli. Reimu flies out of the Scarlet Devil Mansion faster than usual. Her face is red and sticky from all the sweat. The information was to much to handle, in one day. Even for Reimu. Looking down, Reimu sees many sites, but the chaos of these sites doesn't make the thought of another Gensokyo go away. What if what Patchouli found was a true thing? The thought just makes Reimu more worried. When she gets to her house, she gets surprised by Suika, who is swinging from tree to tree. Then, Reimu hears a splat, and then Suika crying out loud. When Reimu gets down, she sees Suika right before the shrine with tears coming from her eyes. Suika's knees are bruised, but not too badly, they're only scraped.
You know what I'm going to say here, right? Line. Breaks.
Also, you don't need to repeat Reimu's name so often, pronouns are your friends.
"
begins to sweat", "sees many
things happening, but they don't", "was
real?", "
is surprised", "a splat,
followed by Suika's crying."
The crying sounds overlap the sounds of the wind.
"The
sound of crying mixes with that of the wind."
Suika stops crying a little and asks, "Do you have Sake?" A grin crosses Suika's face.
"Suika
's crying eases a little and she asks", "her face"
Suika thinks for a minute, and in that minute, the birds start to fly above their heads, and says, "Sake."
"heads
. Eventually she says"
Suika whines sadly and leaves, but her horns get stuck in the doorway. "Ow!" She falls backwards, while Reimu makes her tea, thinking of the idea of another Gensokyo somewhere out there. What if what Patchouli said was true? What if there was darkness that Gensokyo left behind and it formed another Gensokyo, a dark one? "That hurts!" Suika starts to cry again, which Reimu doesn't even notice, this time. Memories of the many pictures in the book flashes in Reimu's head. Suika continues crying. All of them stay for quite a while, but only one stays in Reimu's head for more than five minutes, the one of Marisa. Suika, still cyring, gets up and walks through the doorway, but this time, sideways.After exiting the door, Suika turns around and slams the door shut, slowly. Reimu dismisses the thought. It's too much to think of at the moment. Maybe after a good rest. But it's tea time.
Again, Linebreaks. Also, it is impossible to slam a door slowly.
"
but Reimu doesn't even notice this time.", "
flash though her head", "dismisses the
thoughts.", "But
now, it's tea time."
To be honest it's mostly grammar errors, rather than misspellings.
And remember, I'm just offering advice. You're in no way obligated to do anything I suggest.