Definitely didn't see the dream thing coming.
I think I'll go along with the "guilt" explanation Mind the Gap made up, since I didn't really have any prior plans or ideas.
Also, I'm male.
Oops, missed that XP Will fix now.
And again, as I mentioned, your 'internal conflict' wasn't based on anything at all unlike the others where I had something to go with. Just something I made up. XD I can change it easily if you like. Or you can develop it as you see fit.
I'm sorry but, what the hell is going on exactly?
Essentially, Mitaka was running after a distraught Alice when he bumped into Satori in front of Koji's mansion. Satori decides to take Mitaka deeper into his own memories to show what the entire team was dreaming last night while introducing to him the concept of diving.
By the way, Satori is going to spend the day waylaying people and reminding them of their dream the night before, much like she did to Mitaka. You don't have to go into ALL the details if you don't want to. Just walk away with the knowledge that from now on you can 'dive' to better understand your partners and improve your synchronization.
^Everyone dreamed.
That dream explanation Satori gave seems a little off. After all, immortality is a massive concept that would take more time to crack a mind than say, Reisen's mindblow which a) was instant and b) did happen to McWallace at point blank range no less. Such a dream seems to suggest a lower than average sync rate to me.
This dream gives me a new ingredient to this piece. A whole dynamic of Eirin being afraid of getting left behind. Such lonliness must be explored somehow. A deep story seems to be brewing.
I just mentioned Reisen's mindblow because you had it in your profile and I had little to go with XD. Perhaps it may be a result of a low sync. I don't know. But drinking the hourai elixir alone, dying repeatedly (at the hands of Eirin's meds), may be enough to crack a mind. Yes, I know, fanon seems to suggest that it takes more time than that, but I had nothing else for McWallace XD. Sorry. Feel free to suggest a change if you like.