You're just gonna have to accept the fact that Kinoko is the Simon Cowell of AAA.
To be perfectly honest Espeon, although you are improving, I can't actually point at something in the drawing and say, "You did this correctly." On whole, the character looks kind of weird and stretched out from the sides.
Her face doesn't fit her head, her hair looks awkward, and her torso-hip anatomy just looks off. I can't give you specific corrections - I'm not sure I would know where to start. I can only suggest you study individual body parts more before going for a fuller picture like this.
One thing I can correct - her collarbone should not be slanted up towards the center. It should definitely be more level, and if slanted at all, slanted slightly down towards the center.